99 word prompt : Being yellow
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August 2, 2018, prompt: In 99 words (no more, no less) write a story that includes a yellow tent. Where is it and who does it belong to? Think of how the color adds to the story. Go where the prompt leads.
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Two pictures sat on mom’s kitchen counter; my parents standing near a yellow tent, and a rich bitch wearing yellow standing next to my dad taken days after he’d abandoned mom for her when I turned one.
Mom and I lived in subsidized housing. I made straight A’s in school, had a free ride to the local state college, and mom died a month after I received my degree.
The doorbell rang. I opened it to stare into eyes just like mine.
“Go to hell. It’s yellow there, just like you,” I said, slamming the door in Dad’s face.
Goodness a great story with so much feeling in it.
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Thanks. 🙂
Looking forward to reading yours.
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Well-written! 🙂
Covered so much in just 99 words!
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Thanks.
I read your 99 word prompt. A stellar addition. 🙂
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Sharp contrasts and when the Dad comes to the door, we can feel a lifetime of pain burst from the character. Great writing!
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By the time I got to that point, I was wondering why she didn’t punch him in the nose. Probably because he wasn’t worth the effort.
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A moment like that can be surprising.
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Great flash!
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An epic tale in just 99 words.
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Family dynamics are so rife with possibilities for drama.
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Yup, served him right, Joelle.
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The type we hope will never return. 🙂
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A well woven tale with yellow threaded throughout.
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Sad on so many levels. You went deep into the yellow.
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You’d never know how much I despise bright yellow, would you? 🙂
I’m VERY light sensitive and bright yellow is especially bad.
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Sounds painfully bright.
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If you’ve ever had drops to dilate your eyes for an exam, and then walked out into the light afterwards, that’s what it’s like for me every day. Where I work, all I need is the light from the window and blinds to adjust how much light comes in. I’m thankful every day for a job where people accommodate a need for bar room lighting. 🙂
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It does sound painful. It is good to have colleagues that support you. I have light sensitive eyes too, but not as severely as you do. Before I had a pterygium removed from my right eye, each time I stepped into the sun it felt like a knife was being twisted in my eye. They have been so much more tolerant to sunlight since then, but I still need sunnies whenever I am outdoors. Look after yourself and your eyes. It’s not a pleasant condition.
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It’s rare to find someone who understands, and the knife-in-the-eye when the sunlight is bright shows that you do. 🙂
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Yeah, it’s not pleasant. Look after yourself.
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Karma serves, what u deserve.
Overwhelming short story… 😀😀
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Thanks. 🙂
Karma hits us when we least expect it.
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Exactly !!
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